Question:
A new song with a really rough acoustic recording. Plus my voice is really raw right now from shouting along at the mewithoutYou/Say Anything concert Tuesday and practicing with the band last night. I may also be coming down with a cold. Lovely. Imagine bass and drums with this song, as well as echoes as indicated by the words in parentheses.
Anyhow. Critique! Ruthlessly!
Three Words
[verse]
I've got three words written in my notebook
Now there's nothing worth saying (nothing worth saying)
For a nickel and a dime I'll let you take a look
But is it worth paying? (is it worth paying?)
I'm writing all my poetry in lowercase
In hopes you won't notice (hope you won't notice)
I'm finishing my phrases in second place
But won't let you know this (won't let you know this)
[build]
A little alliteration is all I'm asking for
I'm endlessly searching for a meaningful metaphor
I'll say those three words to remind me what they were
But what they're meant to mean, I'm so dreadfully unsure
[chorus]
I LOVE YOU! (2x)
I've spent years trying to find a way
To say a little differently
Those three words that never seem to mean
Exactly what I want them to mean
[verse]
There are three words passing between our lips
And nothing else matters (nothing else matters)
We'll keep kissing until the apocalypse
And through all our letters (XOXO!)
I'll still mumble incoherently
To keep you from hearing (keep you from hearing)
I'll write all my letters in heiroglyphs
To hide how I'm feeling (hide how I'm feeling)
[build]
[chorus]
[bridge]
This is what it all boils down to
I don't know how to say I love you
Whisper every cliché
(I'll love you forever and a day)
Seems that's all I can do
[chorus]
Answer:
I love this song Skeeter! The music is great...I don't really like the shouting...but thats just me...I think its growing on me..idk. Great Job!