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Okay, I have a few versions of this soneg, please tell me witch version is the best.
Version 1
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My God,
Why have you forsaken me?
Why are you so far from saving me,
so far from the Words of my groaning?
I cry out! But you don't answer me by night.
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But You are enthroned as the Holy One!
Jesus You are enthroned as the Holy One!
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And I am nothing, but a man....
so.... Why have you forsaken me?
Why are you so far from saving me,
For I am nothing but a man....
For I am nothing but a man....
For I am nothing, but, a.... man....
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Version 2
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My God,
Why have you forsaken me?
Why are you so far from saving me,
I cry out! But you don't answer me by night.
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My God,
Why have you forsaken me?
Why are you so far from saving me,
I cry out! But you don't answer me by night.
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For I am nothing, but a man....
and
You are enthroned as the Holy One!
You are enthroned as the Holy One!
You are enthroned as the, Ho....ly.... One!....
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Version 3
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My God,
Why have you forsaken me?
Why are you so far from saving me?
so far from the Words of my groaning?
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For I am nothing, but a man
And you are enthroned as the Holy One!
You are are enthroned as the Holy One!
For I am nothing, but a man
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Why are you so far from saving me?
Why have you forsaken me?
For I am nothing but a man
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I am, just a man
For you are enthroned as the Holy One.
Enthroned as the Holy One.
The songs called Psalm 22.
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Hey, nice Job so far. The verses are pretty good. The chorus is kind of cliche. Try using some different words. But so far, it's pretty good.
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BTW, visit my songs, they are in my sig.
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This is my first song I have ever written,
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Very good for a first one, man!!
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Originally Posted by skilletswitch Very good for a first one, man!!
Thanx!
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Originally Posted by skilletswitch Try using some different words.
Yeah, I was thinking the same, I am working on Version 4, wich will be longer, have different words, and a better Chrous, also, I will try and make it aall one type of music, right now, I cant tell if its Rock, or Worship, I am kind of leaning more twords worship, casuse rock, would be longer, and there would be more/different words, lol
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Worship is a style of writing, not a style of music. Do you know when version 4 will be done?
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Originally Posted by skilletswitch Worship is a style of writing, not a style of music. Do you know when version 4 will be done?
Not exactly, maybe sometime this week.
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Praise & Worship, however, is a style of music.
Interesting arrangements of one of my favorite Psalms. I would suggest that you look deeper into the Psalm and use more of the images and metaphors in there.
Par example:
Psalm 22:9-11
"Yet you brought me out of the womb;
you made me trust in you
even at my mother's breast.
From birth I was cast upon you;
from my mother's womb you have been my God.
Do not be far from me,
for trouble is near
and there is no one to help."
Psalm 22:14
"I am poured out like water,
and all my bones are out of joint.
My heart has turned to wax;
it has melted away within me."
Psalm 22:22
"I will declare your name to my brothers;
in the congregation I will praise you."
Psalm 22:26-28
"The poor will eat and be satisfied;
they who seek the Lord will priase him -
may your hearts live forever!
All the ends of the earth
will remember and turn to the Lord,
and all the families of the nations
will bow down before him,
for dominion belongs to the Lord
and he rules over the nations."
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Praise & Worship, however, is a style of music. What do you mean here, a style of music? I thought praise and worship was defined by the lyrics. You can praise God and worship him with any kind of music, correct? Just asking.
Interesting song though. A little more imagry like skeeter said would help give the song more body.
-d
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Originally Posted by walkwjc What do you mean here, a style of music? I thought praise and worship was defined by the lyrics. You can praise God and worship him with any kind of music, correct? Just asking. Of course you can praise God and worship him with any style of music. But there is a style of music specifically labeled "Praise & Worship" that tends to cover all the modern worship songs you'll hear and sing in church.