Question:
Let Go
Chorus
I’ve gotta get away
Gotta run so far away
Gotta let it go
Everything I know
Gotta let it all
Be loose and fall
Repeat
Verse 1:
Beyond all truth is hiding
A pack of dirty wolves lying
Beneath the darkness fall
I have to let go of it all
I can’t keep running away
From everything making me stay
I’ve got to get away
Gotta run so far away
Repeat Chorus
Bridge:
Fallen in behind
Just one giant line
Of brainless mimicry
Of what we once were
Verse 2:
Beyond all darkness holds light
Never more embrace the night
I’m letting go of what I hold near
I can’t continue to fear
I’ve got to let it go
I’ve got to let it go
I can’t keep breaking down
Or building up anymore
Repeat Chorus
Instrumental Break
Bridge 2:
Just when it seems like we will end
We start all over again
Letting go of what we once held dear
Never again will we fear
Repeat Chorus(x2)
Answer:
Time for some RCing!
Originally Posted by HolyBlood8 Let Go
Chorus
I’ve gotta get away
Gotta run so far away
Gotta let it go
Everything I know
Gotta let it all
Be loose and fall
Repeat This sounds a lot like choruses I wrote about 5 years ago. Unfortunately, that's not really a good thing, as most of my songs were very cliche at that time. There's nothing all that compelling about this chorus. You've rhymed "away" with "away," which is usually not recommended and it just makes me think of Lenny Kravitz (I want to get away, I wanna fly away, yeeeeeeeah yeeeeah yeeeah).
Verse 1:
Beyond all truth is hiding
A pack of dirty wolves lying
Beneath the darkness fall
I have to let go of it all
I can’t keep running away
From everything making me stay
I’ve got to get away
Gotta run so far away The first two lines present an interesting image. You're making a bold statement here; you're saying that all truth has some deception behind it. The only thing hurting it is that you don't continue the image. Instead of furthering how deception lies behind truth (perhaps because people twist the truth?) you go into some generic cliches that basically repeat the chorus. This verse would be stronger if you continued the wolves metaphor.
Bridge:
Fallen in behind
Just one giant line
Of brainless mimicry
Of what we once were I kinda like this. I think it's stronger without the rhyme on the last line; it makes it stand out from the rest of the song. However, I'm not sure how it fits in with the rest of the song.
Verse 2:
Beyond all darkness holds light
Never more embrace the night
I’m letting go of what I hold near
I can’t continue to fear
I’ve got to let it go
I’ve got to let it go
I can’t keep breaking down
Or building up anymore The first line is good, reversing the image of the first verse. That's excellent; you're continuing the idea, expanding on what you were originally saying. Unfortunately, you bog it down with some more cliche lines and some forced rhymes. "Near" and "fear" always go together and it almost always sounds awkward. Search for more natural rhymes that flow from what you want to say. Don't let the rhyme scheme dictate what you say. In the bridge, you break out of the rhyme scheme for the third and fourth lines, resulting in an interesting moment that gets across a point.
Bridge 2:
Just when it seems like we will end
We start all over again
Letting go of what we once held dear
Never again will we fear
The cliches abount. You are a unique individual that God has given unique and interesting qualities too. Don't use the same words and lines that others use. Be original! Look for ways that you can express yourself without falling in line with everyone else!
All in all, I'm really not sure what this song is about. The first and second verse have elements that work together, but the first bridge doesn't seem to fit (though it's the strongest part of the song). The chorus doesn't really say much. Make your chorus say more! It's the part of the song that get's repeated the most, so it has to be interesting enough to withstand repeat listens. It also has to be unique and different, otherwise no one's going to care and no one's going to remember it.
There are some definite strong points to this song; the first couple lines of each verse and the bridge have some potential. Expand on the images you're starting in the verses instead of lapsing into cliche and this song could work.
Keep writing!
Answer:
its realy good
Answer:
i'll talk the my friend about it, he's the one who wrote it see what he wants to do.
thanks