Question:
Oh God! Open my eyes, open my eyes, cause im dying inside, im dying inside! And I'll never know, and I'll never be who you want me to be, cause im dying inside, im dying inside..open my eyes..cause im dying inside.....God! Break me open, just break me open, and fill me, fill me up
I am not sure how I want to break it down into verse and chorus and such but I will figure out that later...
Answer:
Sounds good. Add a little more stuff to it.
Answer:
Ok but try to use different words.
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What do you mean, chem6A?
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Well, USUALLY the beginning verse in song never mention the title, but insinuate (suggesting something with showing it) the title ( or the overall meaning of the song). Your beginning verse uses the phrases Dying inside, and God open my eyes. Your beginnig verse would be awesome as a CHORUS
(if it was a little shorter but still). Here have an example to understand what I'm saying.
Sooner or Later- Switchfoot- New Way to Be Human
Come back and haunt me
Follow me home
Give me motive
Swallow me whole
They say I've lost it
What could I know
When I'm but a mockery
I'm so alone
CHORUS
Sooner or Later you'll find out
There's a whole in the wall...
Notice that in the beginning verse they dont mention the meaning but insinuate the meaning, and they dont even use the title of the song( sooner or later) they use words to insinusate. And in the chorus they mention the
title and meaning(in your song the chorus will be more understandable).
Sorry for taking so long to Post. God Bless