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Hihi, um here is a piece I ended up doing yesterday. It kind of has an Emery feel to it in the aspect that each staza has it's own pattern, but if anyone has ideaa on how to make it better or flow it little bit more that would be great.
thnx
Topic: Christ Dieing for You/Making You a New Creation.
Title: (I Bled)
Title: I Bled
In the ninth hour I felt your cry through my soul.
I felt the blood run down your holy remains.
I saw you crucified there for all those sold.
I saw the heartache written on your bleeding brow.
(pre chorus)
I saw the sky turn blood red as it your tears begin rain down.
I saw the stars blink as your tears hit the ground.
(chorus)
And I bled for you.
All my blood was spilt for you.
All my tears were wept for you.
All my pain was felt for you.
You bled for me…
All that pain and anguish.
Part of me didn’t wish for this.
To feel your sting of sadness.
To touch your tears of misery.
To know you died for more than me.
I recall the words you spoke to me, let me renew
You brought me out of this vacant hole.
Shattering pieces of my heart, to make anew
Pour blood red tears over my desiccated soul.
I saw the sky turn blood red as it your tears began rain down.
I saw the stars blink as your tears hit the ground.
(chorus)
And I bled for you.
All my blood was spilt for you.
All my tears were wept for you.
All my pain was felt for you.
You bled for me…
All that pain and anguish.
Part of me didn’t wish for this.
To feel your sting of sadness.
To touch your tears of misery.
To know you died for more than me.
I saw the sky turn blood red as it your tears began to come down.
I saw the stars blink as your tears hit the ground.

You bled for me…
Answer:
For the chords I'm thinking play everything in G , except for Em, C (I might play C in G too), Am
but the others are:
Gsus4/E
Gm/F
Gmaj
Gmaj7
G#maj7
and
x20233
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I dont know the chord names for those yet.
but I'm not sure yet . Thnx agains
brie
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OK i have a band memeber helping me with chords but a criticisim would still be much appreciated..thnx
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I'm a huge Emery fan, so it seems like it's a good song. My only suggestion would be to maybe attempt to swing the chorus words into the mouth of Jesus like for a tag, or final ending. Or perhaps you could put it like, "You bled for me...etc". I just think it would be really powerful to have Jesus saying those words back to the mourner. But that's just me, so...yeah.
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do you mean Dessicrated Soul?
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Thanks
and no i meant desiccated, it means dry or pulverised in the dictionary. Um I think Im gonna change the title but im not sure yet...but yea i meant Desiccated.
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Originally Posted by Adam_8287 do you mean Dessicrated Soul?
do you mean Desecrated Soul?
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Originally Posted by electrikkdreamz Thanks
and no i meant desiccated, it means dry or pulverised in the dictionary. Um I think Im gonna change the title but im not sure yet...but yea i meant Desiccated.
Well you learn something new every day.
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Originally Posted by Nate do you mean Desecrated Soul?
Lol noo I mean Desiccated. It means dried and often pulverized. In the Encarta Dictionary lol.
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I know what desiccated means, and I know what you meant. I was poking fun at Adam#'s for picking on your spelling (which he thought was wrong) whilst making spelling mistakes himself.
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hahaha ooo i feel like a retard lol