Question:
This is something i just wrote up.. needs a lot of work but does the verse/Chorus sound ok?
VERSE
It never works
You wonder why
You always fail
You never try
It never works
You wonder why
But in the end you understand….
CHORUS
Where’s your effort?
You’re not that weak
Where’s your effort?
You know you’re strong enough…
Give your best effort
And get the job done…
Answer:
Originally Posted by natedawg5280 This is something i just wrote up.. needs a lot of work but does the verse/Chorus sound ok?
ok, lets hear it....... im waiting! oh, yeah, my bad...
Originally Posted by natedawg5280 VERSE
It never works
You wonder why
You always fail
You never try
It never works
You wonder why
But in the end you understand….
ok so far, sounds pretty kool. i dont know why, but this reminds me of something, i just cant put my finger on it tho.
Originally Posted by natedawg5280 CHORUS
Where’s your effort?
You’re not that weak
Where’s your effort?
You know you’re strong enough…
Give your best effort
And get the job done…
WHOOHOO!!!! PEP RALLY!! i mean...uhh. whoops, the chorus just took me off gaurd there for a sec.
the last phrase of the verse doesnt lead into the chorus very well. tho maybe you already have a melody picked out for it an it fits. but just straight reading it with no music it just seems like it dont fit.
other'n that, its awsome. hope you can finish it sometime
Answer:
Originally Posted by Demon_hunter the last phrase of the verse doesnt lead into the chorus very well. tho maybe you already have a melody picked out for it an it fits. but just straight reading it with no music it just seems like it dont fit.
good observation,, many thanks!!