Question:
this is a song i wrote, i already got the music critiqued as much as people may care to, so here are the words, i'll put the recording up here also

be very mean
verse 1
let the artist play their songs
let the singers sing till the breaking of dawn
let the merchant place sales in a closed glass display
let you never run away

lately i've been dreamin of an angel
lately i've been dreamin of you
latley i've noticed that you always noticed me
when i've always noticed you

verse 2
great poets had greater rhymes
and their poems had value in their place and time
but words would never scale the truth
the monotnous death fearing truth

those old pictures will tear you apart
place the parts in a box ship you to a new start
with a new face masked by a new love
and a family of binary words
outro/chorus
fill the streets with unusual men
miss the light touch of your delicate skin
march onto the feild with their guns in our face
if your free you'd run if your righteous you'd stay

the death of a man is his mind
with one kiss we leave God behind
don't think before you act
the time has come and past

(i know the music is a little off at the end)
Answer:
sounds awesome, i really like the lyrics
"let the merchant place sales in a closed glass display "
sounds kind of akward when you sing it