Question:
Poem I wrote a few months back. I think I am a decent songwriter but I still have quite a few flaws (hence wanting any advice, harsh or not). The poem musically would be a moderate speed rock song.
Look to the Skies
Listen to the Wind
Revolution is coming
About to begin
War among the nations
Least of our problems
The Beast is in waiting
For his chance to strike
Gather the Lord’s armies
Young and old
Prepare yourself now
Are You Ready?
Where are the people
Where is the cry
The horizon is filled
With righteous soldiers
War is coming
Only one resolution
So tell me dear children
Are you ready for the revolution?
The mighty weapons we wield
Shall never falter
The enemy is craving battle
We crave as well
Lift up our voices
Draw our swords
Let the white stallion
Lead us to Satan’s hordes
We’ve waited long
Gathering the armies
The trumpets are blaring
Are you ready?
There it is. Have at it.
Answer:
Good song over all. You may want to do something with the title because when I hear it or see it all I think about is that creed song. But I liked the song as a whole.

Where are the people
Where is the cry
The horizon is filled
With Righteous soldiers
War is coming
Only one resolution
So tell me dear children
Are you ready for the revolution?
This is the only part of the song that threw me off. You said where are the people. Then you answered yourself with the next line. What is the resolution? Whose children are you talking too? Maybe I'm just too tired to think right, right now. I'll come back and look at this later. But I did like the song over all.
One Love
Jake
Answer:
Well as to your question i dont know hehe...i write sporadically and sometimes i dont make sense....um...the people could be about the people who arent ready to fight