Question:
"One Way"
by Final Hour
There's only one way into Heaven
It's not through Budda or Muhammed
It's not through works and I can't boast
It's not by giving 'cause You gave the most
You are the Way, the Truth and the Life
Your hand is with me through the strife
I can't go anywhere without You
Your name is Jesus Christ
There's no remission without blood spilling
My flesh is weak but my spirit's willing
To trust in You with all my might
and walk in faith and not by sight
You are the Way, the Truth and the Life
Your hand is with me through the strife
I can't go anywhere without You
Your name is Jesus Christ
I don't understand why You would love me
and I don't understand why You would
give Your life for me, for me
You are the Way, the Truth and the Life
Your hand is with me through the strife
I can't go anywhere without You
Your name is Jesus Christ
You are the Way, the Truth and the Life
Your hand is with me through the strife
I can't go anywhere without You
Your name is Jesus Christ
Your name is Jesus Christ, Yeah
Your name is Jesus Christ
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I also have music to go along with it but no way to record either so all comments are encouraged.
Oh yeah, it's my b-day today!!! I'm 21!!!
Answer:
I haven't done a proper RC in a while. Feel special.
Originally Posted by E-Dogg777 "One Way"
by Final Hour It's a worthy subject to tackle, but this title is a bit blah. I mean, it gets the job done, but there's many, many songs with the same title. But it's not a big deal.
There's only one way into Heaven
It's not through Budda or Muhammed
It's not through works and I can't boast
It's not by giving 'cause You gave the most I actually really like the last two lines of this verse. The first line is your basic intro, gets the job done, but these last two work really well. The second line kind of strikes me as a cheap shot, but it could also be a bit of a fun thing as well.
You are the Way, the Truth and the Life
Your hand is with me through the strife
I can't go anywhere without You
Your name is Jesus Christ Argh! I realize that nothing rhymes with life except for wife, knife, and strife, but that doesn't make it any less painful. For that reason, I tend to avoid the "ife" ending at the end of my lines so that I never have to use such painful rhymes. Please, avoid the life/strife rhyme in the future.
The last two lines are pretty basic. I can see "your name is Jesus Christ" being a good hook, but I think you can come up with something better for a third line.
There's no remission without blood spilling
My flesh is weak but my spirit's willing
To trust in You with all my might
and walk in faith and not by sight First two lines are great here. Spilling/willing is a nice uncommon rhyme that you've used really well. It's not awkward at all. Good stuff. The last two lines are a little cliché. I recognize their truth, but isn't there a different way to say that truth?
I don't understand why You would love me
and I don't understand why You would
give Your life for me, for me It works. Nothing fancy, but it works.
This is decent. You've got a couple really good couplets in there, but you've also got some filler and one painful rhyme. I think, with a little work, this could be a really good song.
And happy birthday!
Answer:
Thanks a bunch! I must admit that I didn't come up with this on my own. I wrote down what the Holy Spirit has been speaking to me lately. I really love this song because it's a simple but powerful message and the music that goes along with it really rocks too.
I agree that there are several cliche lines in there I guess I feel in cliches
Thanks for the input and GOD bless.
Love in Christ,
E-Dogg777