Question:
This one here's kind of a love song. I just finished it today.
REFLECTION
Verse 1:
As I saw you
Walking up to say goodbye
It didn't hit me
How much it would hurt inside
As later on it
Sunk into my mind
That I wouldn't see you smile
For a very long time
I just hugged you
And sent you on your way
I didn't think that
There was any more to say
Now that I reflect
I regret it
I should have held you longer
And I wish that you could stay
Chorus:
Everytime I turn around
I see you standing there
In my mind, holding on
Keeping me back in time
Verse 2:
I'm at home on my own
And I'm missing you
Don't even have a decent picture
To remember you by
I took a survey and
The colour of my life is blue
But it would be gray
If it wasn't for meeting you
-Chorus-
Bridge:
I'll go out of my way
To tell you
Just what you mean to me
I miss you
I may be shy
It may feel akward at times
But I want you to know
I've got you on my mind
Here's one I made a while ago.
LIVE
Verse1:
I look up
And see Your face
You look within me
Into my eyes and soul
I look down
At empty space
And it fills me with
The thought of knowing You
Chorus:
I want to see Your face again
I know this time I'll have to try to stay alive
I want to feel Your touch again
Burn in me the hunger to survive
Verse2:
Touching You
I feel Your warmth and light
As they reach out to me
And burn away these fears
Loving you
I feel your grace
Wrap its arms 'round me
And hold me to You tight
Bridge:
You love me
You whisper to me
You reach out to me
Waddya think? Comments? Critique?
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off to the songwriting forum
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I really really like both songs. The first one i esspecially like because i can relate to it. i was in a relationship that fits that song and i can tell you that's exactly how i felt.
tight songs dude.
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Here's a worship song I'm working on:
Pre-Chorus
With a voice that burns the heart
In a tone that lights the stars
Chorus
You speak to my heart
You shout to my soul
You give me a peace that I have never known
And all I can do
Is see wonder in You
As You sweep me away with the song of Your grace
I'm totally stumped for verses ... I think I'll leave it for a while.
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dangit....first one hit home really hard lol, but they all sound good, no cheesy rhymes either everything seems to fit
good job
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Haha, thanks man.
Hey, can a mod or someone add *RC* to my topic title? I didn't notice the forum rules before I posted .
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really sweet lyrics!!!!!!
dangit, wish i could write lyrics that good. compared to yours mine are cheesy sounding, lol