Question:
*Verse 1*
I can still see your face, and I can hear your voice
reaching out to everything, everything that we've been through
Though there's smile on your face, I can see the emptiness that burns you through
The song on your lips are as fake as the ashes as flakes of snow
*Chrous*
And I'm still wondering how
You could ever hold you from being yourself
And I'm standing there by your side
Unable to defeat this uprising wall
*Some ending part*
My heart is turning to stone, though I want this to end
it takes more than just two of us to break this invisible wall
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Still have one more verse to finish, and add 2 lines to the ending part.
Any input is welcome.
Answer:
I like it... the only problem is it seems a little short, but you've already noticed that and are working on it...
Other than that it's great! I'll be looking forward to seeing the finished product!