Question:
This is something I threw together today, this evening in fact, and blew into the face of the problem, that this subject is so very cliched, so yeah, this is my attempt.
A Fresh Cliche
verse 1:
Words are in truth a quite exquisite thing,
They allow you to understand the things I sing,
Linguistics are a miracle that we all duly embrace,
But almost nothing is worse than a syllable out of place,

The thing about words is that there’s nothing you can say,
That won’t come across as completely cliché,
So I'll just shut up,
and hope that's enough
verse 2:
Words are in fact a curse and a shame,
They are a birthplace of evil and an unquenchable flame,
They are a source of endless offensive abuse,
But if we handle them carefully we can put them to good use,

The thing about words is that there’s nothing you can say,
That won’t come across as completely cliché,
So I'll just shut up,
and hope that's enough
Bridge:
Words are a paradox of living human life,
They can heal bloody wounds or cut like a razor-sharp knife,
They are an atom bomb they will diffuse on their own,
They are a special interest cause that they refuse to condone,

The thing about words is that there’s nothing you can say,
That won’t come across as completely cliché,
So I'll just shut up,
and hope that's enough
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So that's it, have fun shredding.
Answer:
Originally Posted by Small This is something I threw together today, this evening in fact, and blew into the face of the problem, that this subject is so very cliched, so yeah, this is my attempt.
A Fresh Cliche
verse 1:
Words are in truth a quite exquisite thing,
They allow you to understand the words that I sing,
Linguistics are a miracle that we all duly embrace,
But almost nothing is worse than a syllable out of place,
Your first 2 lines are awkward. The repeat of the word "words" doesn't make sense. You're saying words help you understand words. It doesn't work.
I like the rest of the verse.
The thing about words is that there’s nothing you can say,
That won’t come across as completely cliché,
So instead of saying anything more I’ll save my words,
Instead just think about all the other warnings you’ve heard,
And let them be enough,
like you said, this subject is cliche and despite all your efforts, this chorus is no exception. It's solid but it's nothing new .
verse 2:
Words are in fact a curse and a shame,
They are a birthplace of evil and an unquenchable flame,
They are a source of endless offensive abuse,
But if we’re extremely careful we can put them to good use,
This is better than the first verse. "extremely careful" seems to be the wrong words. maybe something like "But if we're less careless and more cautious we can put them to good use". just a suggestoin.
Bridge:
Words are a paradox of living human life,
They can heal bloody wounds or cut like a razor-sharp knife,
They are an atom bomb they will diffuse on their own,
They are a special interest cause that they refuse to condone,
This is very good. Great imagery. The second line is cliche, but it fits well and the rest of the bridge makes up for it.
Oxymoron is a word; words are oxymoronic,
Or at the very least they are dreadfully ironic,
However much you think about it the problem still remains,
But don’t think about it too hard or you’ll bust out all your brains,

This part needs to go. Or be rewritten. It does very little for the song. You're saying the problem exists, but don't think about it? It weakens your point. I'd get rid of it.
So that's it, have fun shredding.
you know i did
Answer:
duly noted, I changed a couple of things, and cut out the last part. Also, the repeat of "words" was a mistake when I was writing it down, and I am horridly embarrassed that it came through.
Yeah, you did have fun, but it's good to read the critique.