Question:
Something I jotted down in Chem class today. Rip it to shreds.

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Visit the brown house
On the hill
You feel the same, but
You're so ill.
Hanging on a bat's bright wings
Trying to reach the sky
Walk to the green
Open spaces
To your old
Hidden places
Longingly looking at the moon
It's low beacause you're so high.
They're looking out for amity
They're looking out for amity
They're lashing out at amity
They're looking now for amity
They're looking out for amity
Will they find their amity
Or will it always be gone?
Answer:
I don't understand it. Or perhaps this is due to lack of sleep.
Answer:
It is quite ambiguous; however I kinda like that it doesn't explicitly tell what's going on. However, it does need a bit more to tell what the speaker is going through. I can picture the scenery just fine, but I don't quite know what's going through his/her mind.
A couple of ideas:
I sense a contemplative, "looking back" mood. Maybe you can go with that a bit more... tell what the speaker is thinking about from his/her past, what happened to him or her, etc.
What is this amity they are seeking? Where can it be found? Where are they? Who are "they, for that matter. Describe a bit more.
Good start though. I look forward to reading more.