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It isn't really finished at all, but I'll update it once in a while. Here's the first verse. I've got it to a state that I'm pretty happy with it, but you might see something that might get it better.
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Verse 1:
As I'm wandering this road my destiny is boasting
As I'm traveling, from the pillar to the coast I'm
Feeling tied down all to something way behind my back
My shaking hand is trying to tear the chain
To all the vapidness I valued in my life
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Umm.. Any comments?
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Nice, you have an awesome voice! I'd like to see a bit more of this song, and a strong chorus definately! I think what you have so far is little to RC because there's not a whole lot of room for mistakes. Finish up the song and maybe the recording, and you'll probably get a few more comments. Nice one!
Philipe
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Thanks for the replies so far. Yeah, I'm working on it.
It is going pretty slowly though. I've been working on a chorus, and it got a very minor and power-growing nature, and then at some point I just decided that this chorus will belong to another song, not this one (It got away from the feel, atmosphere and theme of the song)
I'm still working here and there on the song. Hope I'll update here pretty soon.
God Bless,
Danny
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Wow.. Didn't touch this one for a big while.. Here's an update.
Verse 1:
As I'm wandering this road my destiny is boasting
As I'm traveling, from the pillar to the coast I'm
Feeling tied down all to something way behind my back
My shaking hand is trying to tear the chain
To all the vapidness I valued in my life
And what I cry to be
Chorus:
is Someone who's free
To take my breath out of the cage
And its going round and going on
Have I already forgot that I am free?
I'm here just 'til I get my wage
And its long ago is all foregone
Its not to me that I belong to
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Still thinking if I should add a second verse, or just do a bridge of some sort and leave it with one verse.
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Humph.. This song sure gets "lots" of replies ..
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Wow! I really, really like your voice, and the song is beautiful. I'd like to hear the chorus. I really like it
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Post tab please?