Question:
I won't be embarassed if you read my mind at the right time
Breaking the silence without a word
Because words are expensive and talking is cheap
Easy to imagine but so hard to see
What needs to be said will never be heard
[chorus]
Simple hellos become complex goodbyes
Awkwardly reaching for reasons for leaving
When I don't want to go
I don't want to leave your side
I should have said it sooner when I knew that I meant it
Foreshadowed from beginning by revealing the ending
I should have said it sooner when Iknew that I meant it
I should have said it sooner
I should have said it sooner
Answer:
Originally Posted by Skeeter I won't be embarassed if you read my mind at the right time
Breaking the silence without a word
Because words are expensive and talking is cheap
Easy to imagine but so hard to see
What needs to be said will never be heard

[chorus]
Simple hellos become complex goodbyes
Awkwardly reaching for reasons for leaving
When I don't want to go
I don't want to leave your side

I should have said it sooner when I knew that I meant it
Foreshadowed from beginning by revealing the ending
I should have said it sooner when Iknew that I meant it
I should have said it sooner
I should have said it sooner
The first part, the verse I guess, seems sort of awkward. Meaning, it could work with the right music, but I'd need to hear it to understand what you're going for. It seems good for the most part, except the last line seems sort of thrown in.
The chorus is nice. Same thing with it as with the verse. I can't quite piece together how it flows.
The third part will probably work also. Except the second line confuses me. I don't quite understand what it means.

It has promise, but I'd like to hear it.

Josh.
Answer:
Originally Posted by Josh The first part, the verse I guess, seems sort of awkward. Meaning, it could work with the right music, but I'd need to hear it to understand what you're going for. It seems good for the most part, except the last line seems sort of thrown in. Yeah, I've been experimenting with several different chord progressions for the verse. The lyrics will change based on the final melody.
The chorus is nice. Same thing with it as with the verse. I can't quite piece together how it flows. The chorus has a melody and it flows well.
The third part will probably work also. Except the second line confuses me. I don't quite understand what it means. It's just an overly complex way of saying "I should have said it sooner". It may get rewritten because of its awkwardness.
It has promise, but I'd like to hear it. I'll hopefully have a recording for it by next week.