Question:
I need help!!!!!!!!!!!! I wrote this chorus about two months ago and wrote the verse a couple weeks ago. I realy want to finish it!!! ANY advice would be AWESOME!!!
[Chorus]
I don't wanna be another nameless face
I don't wanna be pushing my way throught the crowds
I don't need to see what I know to be true
You're my one true thing
My answer is You
[Verse]
I have been trying to find my place in this world
Desperately yearning for someone to notice this little girl
I am so tired of fighting my way through
All my dreams have expired
My only hope is you
[verse2]
My dreams are so much bigger
Than my five foot frame
I want to be remembered for something
Don't want to be just another name
When you look at me
Am I only a little girl
Can't you see
I won't fit inside your little world
It needs a lot more so tell me what you think!!
Answer:
ANYONE??????????????????????????????
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I dont have much advice, but I think its a great start, and I am interested to hear the rest.
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So I decided to make this my fragment post cause I have another one that I REALLY REALLY REALLY need help on!!! Okay, background on this fragment: These past couple years I've become more and more disgusted with the American church as a whole. I'm sick of watching so many "christians" use God for their own purposes and not really live out a christian life. I'm sick of seeing people pay lip service on Sunday mornings, thinking that if they attend church every sunday and drop a few pennies in the offering plate every now and again then they've done their "Christian duty" and they can go about living life as they please every other day of the week. This song is not a "feel good" song. It's an in your face, here's the truth, deal with it and learn, song. Right now all I have are some very fragmented lyrics that need A LOT of fleshing out. I really want this song to be full of imagry. If you have any insights, PLEASE let me know. If you hate it, tell me why. If you love it, tell me why.
You carry God in your back pocket
A credit card you pull out when you don't
Have the change on hand
But it's okay
Because you always make your payments
"In God we Trust"
Your good-luck charm
A rabbits foot on your keychain
And you're a ten-cent whore
Selling your goods on the nearest street corner
HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It needs SO MUCH MORE!!!!
Answer:
I have more for my song!! Look for it under: Rotting Corpses
Answer:
Added another verse to the first posted song, what do you think?