Question:
Verse 1
He sits there, all alone
Got no friends and he's on his own
He's waiting, for just a phone call
An email message or anything at all
Pre-Chorus
Cuz nothing could make it worse for him
All he needs is just a friend
Chorus
A friend who will always love
And is there when you need him most
A friend that'll pull you through
Every mess you get into
A friend that would die for you, that's one friend to hold on to
Verse 2
Living all this time
Never failing cuz he never tried
He wants to say goodbye
Cuz no one cared his entire life
Pre-Chorus
Chorus
Interlude guitar solo
Bridge
I think he found that friend
To stop his loneliness
And break his chains so he can finally live
Chorus
End woot.
Answer:
C'mon guys....I need input, i'm an aspiring musician
Answer:
Originally Posted by rippinforjesus Verse 1
He sits there, all alone
Got no friends and he's on his own
He's waiting, for just a phone call
An email message or anything at all It's ok. Very cliche ryhmes though.
Pre-Chorus
Cuz nothing could make it worse for him
All he needs is just a friend This part is fine.
Chorus
A friend who will always love
And is there when you need him most
A friend that'll pull you through
Every mess you get into
A friend that would die for you, that's one friend to hold on to Good ideas for the chorus here, but nothing seems to ryhme... at all. Well, there is the exception of "through-to", but thats cliche. Good thoughts for the chorus here. I like what its saying.
Verse 2
Living all this time
Never failing cuz he never tried
He wants to say goodbye
Cuz no one cared his entire life Very vague... or how should i put this... general... But the ryhmes are better.
Pre-Chorus
Chorus
Interlude guitar solo
Bridge
I think he found that friend
To stop his loneliness
And break his chains so he can finally live
Chorus
End woot. Again, Nothing ryhmes... but the ideas and the thoughts in this bridge and the way it blends in with the chorus is good. I like that. It's ok overall, but keep working on it, and it could be great.
Later,
DJ Kirby