Question:
I decided to see how fast I could possibly write a song. So... here is the result.
Time: Three minutes and fifty-four seconds.
Tear it apart, ladies and lesser breeds of germs.
A thousand words get transcribed to paper
Sacrosanct thoughts that nobody ever knew
And when I wrote you a letter
I put it in the mail and it faded away
We walked and laughed in the summer,
A one-beat skip to the drums of a happy man
A promise of rain didn’t threaten us,
We just popped an umbrella and kept on our merry way.
And when I wrote you a letter
I put it in the mail and it faded away.
Happy times now, happy times now,
The joy of a new friend found is gone.
Everybody drifts, everybody changes
Into what they will forever be.
You changed; I’m still the same,
And when I wrote you a letter,
I put it in the mail and it faded away.
And I never heard back,
Thirty-some-odd-cent stamp wasted.
You didn’t wait before you didn’t respond,
Envelopes and paper wasted.
Time and emotions are wasted.

Answer:
Originally Posted by H.M. Murdock I decided to see how fast I could possibly write a song. So... here is the result.
Time: Three minutes and fifty-four seconds.
Tear it apart, ladies and lesser breeds of germs.
Will do...
A thousand words get transcribed to paper
Sacrosanct thoughts that nobody ever knew
And when I wrote you a letter
I put it in the mail and it faded away
The use of sacrosanct seems very out of place here. It's a really cool word, but it is somewhat lengthy and maybe too sophisticated for this peice. I would suggest using "sacred", or another more common term. The use of the last line throughout the whole song seems like an interesting idea.
We walked and laughed in the summer,
A one-beat skip to the drums of a happy man
A promise of rain didn’t threaten us,
We just popped an umbrella and kept on our merry way.
And when I wrote you a letter
I put it in the mail and it faded away.
This is cool.. I think my favorite line would be the second, and my least favorite - the fourth. It's probably the word 'merry' that kind of throws off the line. I'm not sure. I'll think about it.
Happy times now, happy times now,
The joy of a new friend found is gone.
Everybody drifts, everybody changes
Into what they will forever be.
You changed; I’m still the same,
And when I wrote you a letter,
I put it in the mail and it faded away.
This is good.. I would suspect this to be the Chorus.. it's pretty nice. I like the second line, "friend found..." is good.
The third to last is kind of cliche, IMO.. but it's not completely noticeable to me.
And I never heard back,
Thirty-some-odd-cent stamp wasted.
You didn’t wait before you didn’t respond,
Envelopes and paper wasted.
Time and emotions are wasted.
I like this a lot. The second line throws in a different mood to me.. like, it tries to introduce a more emo-ish type of music, minus the sloppy tears and blood stuff... wait, I take that back.. I don't know what it introduces.
The third line is good as well, I like the way it is worded. The last line is a little empty. It just doesn't sound like "an end" to me.. it doesn't sound concluding.. well, I mean, it's so straight forward that it comes off really dry.
Well, I wish I could type more, but I've gotta skidattle..
Swank