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Here it is:

Spinning webs and poetry
Songs fill the skies
Are cloudy today
Is when I lose my mind
My ways and my life
Is for You
Are my beautiful Savior
Love my hope and hear
Me sing
My spinning webs and poetry
Songs fill the skies
Are blue today
Is when I lose my mind
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Originally Posted by guitarfreak217 Here it is:

Spinning webs and poetry
Songs fill the skies
Are cloudy today
Is when I lose my mind
My ways and my life
Is for You
Are my beautiful Savior
Love my hope and hear
Me sing
My spinning webs and poetry
Songs fill the skies
Are blue today
Is when I lose my mind Is this a song? I'm not sure how you would put music to this. If you can, then fantastic. Good writing here, but the technique gets in the way of the meaning in a few places.
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Originally Posted by Skeeter Is this a song? I'm not sure how you would put music to this. If you can, then fantastic. Good writing here, but the technique gets in the way of the meaning in a few places. Yeah, I was planning on it being more of a poem spoken over some weird soundscape type of music. I have managed to come up with some weird melodies and such that might work. It's just kind of short. And the reason for the odd writing style is the influence that EE Cummings has had on me through reading his poetry. Now he had a weird style of writing and it was different for every poem too.

Edit: Oh, do you think that lines 5-7 are a tad cliche? Or does the weird way of reading it sort of relieve it a bit of it?
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Originally Posted by guitarfreak217 Yeah, I was planning on it being more of a poem spoken over some weird soundscape type of music. I have managed to come up with some weird melodies and such that might work. It's just kind of short. And the reason for the odd writing style is the influence that EE Cummings has had on me through reading his poetry. Now he had a weird style of writing and it was different for every poem too.

Edit: Oh, do you think that lines 5-7 are a tad cliche? Or does the weird way of reading it sort of relieve it a bit of it? Those lines are pretty typical, but the style of the piece kind of throws that off, so it's not too bad.
e.e.cummings is my favorite poet, for the record. Keep in mind, his stylistic choices were always relevant to the meaning of his poetry. Do you have a reason for the style here or did you choose this style just to be different?
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Originally Posted by Skeeter Those lines are pretty typical, but the style of the piece kind of throws that off, so it's not too bad.

e.e.cummings is my favorite poet, for the record. Keep in mind, his stylistic choices were always relevant to the meaning of his poetry. Do you have a reason for the style here or did you choose this style just to be different?
I chose this style to do something a bit different from everything else that I've been writing, where every line to an extent makes grammatical sense.
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Originally Posted by guitarfreak217 I chose this style to do something a bit different from everything else that I've been writing, where every line to an extent makes grammatical sense. My question is, does this have any benefit to the meaning of the song/poem?