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as to " Broken Heart Frenzy" this one is more laid back, a song from the heart to God. The chorus has slight distortion and is rocky.
The world is turning

The world is searching
The world is in need of You.
Everything is crashing down
Where can You be found, Father?
The cry for love has sounded...
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You are my constant faith, I know your love will never break, Away from Me. And you are my constant faith , this i know will never shake, for i am on solid ground.
VS-2 -
I search my life trying to find what is real, They say He's not there, But there's no denying how you make me feel, when im with you. I'll live my ways according to you , let my life be pleasing to you , I never saw the wind, but i felt it everywhere, My life , my soul, my all, depends on you.
I am still working on the rest but tell me if u like it ... i'm 16 yrs old. so im not a vet at writing. It seemed after 9/11 everyone was searching for Love or God as the world was " crashing Down". that is what this song is based on. When we stray , we remember He is our non stop , always loving Father, our " Constant Faith".
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i'm not much of a critik, but i would definitely not say anything to be corrected.(what i just said is the truth, not something just to say "oh, how good you are!" and not really mean it. get the picture?)
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Originally Posted by dudeman_100 i'm not much of a critik, but i would definitely not say anything to be corrected.(what i just said is the truth, not something just to say "oh, how good you are!" and not really mean it. get the picture?)
yeh yo i get it
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Do you have more lyrics to this song?
It has alot of potential... I would love to see more.
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Originally Posted by swtMaebird Do you have more lyrics to this song?
It has alot of potential... I would love to see more.
YUP
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Sooo, are you going to post the lyrics?
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Originally Posted by swtMaebird Sooo, are you going to post the lyrics?
i did , vs 2 wasnt there
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Originally Posted by freedom_fighter i did , vs 2 wasnt there
Aha! I hardly ever go back and reread the same post... sorry.
But, hey, the second verse is pretty good! Are you writing more ?
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Originally Posted by swtMaebird Aha! I hardly ever go back and reread the same post... sorry.
But, hey, the second verse is pretty good! Are you writing more ?
yeh, i havent got more yet, but im working on it
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'k. I'd love to read it when it is finished.
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Originally Posted by freedom_fighter as to " Broken Heart Frenzy" this one is more laid back, a song from the heart to God. The chorus has slight distortion and is rocky.
The world is turning

The world is searching
The world is in need of You.
Everything is crashing down
Where can You be found, Father?
The cry for love has sounded...
Chorus:
You are my constant faith, I know your love will never break, Away from Me. And you are my constant faith , this i know will never shake, for i am on solid ground.
VS-2 -
I search my life trying to find what is real, They say He's not there, But there's no denying how you make me feel, when im with you. I'll live my ways according to you , let my life be pleasing to you , I never saw the wind, but i felt it everywhere, My life , my soul, my all, depends on you.
it's good except the "can't deny how you make me feel when i'm with you". that line is pretty much as cliche as it gets lol. that one line makes me wince and just sticks like a sore thumb to me. I think you could change it to something like "but there's no denying what i feel, it has to be bigger than me". something like that.
then i don't know if youe made a typo but the line "i'll live my ways according to you". I think you might have meant "I'll live my days according to you".
then i''d somehow change that line after it about life being pleasing to God to maybe "i'll make my life pleasing to you". as it is now it's unclear who is doing the action, you or God.
but with those changes i could see this as a solid song.