Question:
Taken from Ecclesiastes 5, 11
Verse 1
What man can say he knows the future?
Who can say what'll happen in days to come?
No man has power over tomorrow
Or the rising and the setting of the sun
Verse 2
All these years, all this knowledge adds up to nothing
Even at this age I am no less clueless than the day I was born
I read my books, I studied my facts, I tried to know everything I could
But I'm no better than if those books were left unworn
Chorus:
I don't know the path of the wind
I don't know what may happen to this land
I don't understand how you work
But you're in heaven and I'm here on earth
Verse 3
It is you that commands the wind to blow
You control the tide with a word from your mouth
You hold eternity in the palm of your hand
In your grasp is the north and the south
Bridge:
To call it awe would be putting it lightly
Just to listen is all that I can do
There are no words that could do justice
So I stand speechless as I face you
The size of the lines in the second verse is intentional and fits well (I think) with the rest of the song. Any other critiquing would be much appreciated.
Answer:
I very much like what you've done with this song. The rhymes are natural and don't sound forced. The lines are interesting to read and stray enough from the cliché to keep me reading. This sounds like it would be an awesome worship song.