Question:
Umm, yes. I wrote this for the girl I will marry. It's so cheesy. Tear it up.

*Never*

i just love the way she sings for me
and carries out the tune for all to see
i just love the notes that she creates
so i will sit and listen 'til my fears have gone away
and i know time won't stay, rhyme will change
but my love for her will never go away.

i just love the way she moves for me
and shuffles both her feet and swings her hips to catch the beat
i just love the shape her body makes
and i will dance along with her 'cause i have found my place
and i know the rhythm won't stay, and though we age
my love for her will never go away.

i just love the way she looks at me
and how she rolls her eyes to make my life feel so complete
i just love her smile that makes my day
and everyday is filled up with the joy that she has made
and i know these lines all state in a similar way
that my love for her will never go away.

woah... etc.

Josh.
Answer:
Fantastic.. I love it..
Cheesy? Sure... but how could it be any good for this girl if it wasn't?
*Never*
i just love the way she sings for me
and carries out the tune for all to see
i just love the notes that she creates
so i will sit and listen 'til my fears have gone away
and i know time won't stay, rhyme will change
but my love for her will never go away.
This is such a cool beginning.. my only critique here is that the first couple of lines seem too simple compared to the rest of the verse and the rest of the song. But I do like it...
i just love the way she moves for me
and shuffles both her feet and swings her hips to catch the beat
i just love the shape her body makes
and i will dance along with her 'cause i have found my place
and i know the rhythm won't stay, and though we age
my love for her will never go away. this is nice... some catchy lines in the middle..
i just love the way she looks at me
and how she rolls her eyes to make my life feel so complete
i just love her smile that makes my day
and everyday is filled up with the joy that she has made
and i know these lines all state in a similar way
that my love for her will never go away. this isn't as good as the rest of the song. The first two lines are awesome.. but then you kind of roll off into lines with less originality..
This is a really good song.. I like the music you have for it as well..
It'd be cool to hear it with a band.. and some harmony..
Swank