Question:
This is taken from 1 corinthians 3
Verse 1
The passion in your letter
Was more than i could take
Now watch my knees bend
And see my heart break
the stars leave my eyes
And I see where I went wrong
Betraying myself
Forsaking my God
Chorus
Legalists, politics
this is what we are today
Lost in the catchphrase, the cliche
We've lost sincerity, conviction, love, clarity
everything that lasts
Now when silver and gold burn away
will this all be reduced to ash?
Verse 2
We clothe ourselves
with threads of e m i n e n c e*
To cover broken hearts
The work of consequence
for the shades of gray
and colors of whim
we add to the black and white
I can't think of another line to end the second verse.
*something keeps bleeping that word out for some strange reason.
Answer:
Originally Posted by Dirt_Jumper This is taken from 1 corinthians 3
Verse 1
The passion in your letter
Was more than i could take
Now watch my knees bend
And see my heart break
the stars leave my eyes
And I see where I went wrong
Betraying myself
Forsaking my God I like this verse. A lot. Good job!
Chorus
Legalists, politics
this is what we are today
Lost in the catchphrase, the cliche
We've lost sincerity, conviction, love, clarity
everything that lasts
Now when silver and gold burn away
will this all be reduced to ash? This is very nice, too.
Verse 2
We clothe ourselves
with threads of ence
To cover broken hearts
The work of consequence Are you looking for a word here? I can't think of anything...
I'm working on the rest of the second verse and the bridge. For the rest of the verse i'm thinking of something about the consequence of seeking only worldy riches and how that will let us down and break our hearts. I like it. The second verse could use some work, but you're working on that. I can't wait for the revision. Good job!
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It's supposed to be e m i n e n c e there. Something is bleeping it out for some odd reason.
Answer:
Is eminence a bad word? I'll see...
Edit: I guess not, I don't know what happened...
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It only bleeped the part, so i don't know. My computer has this wierd junk filter, that probably had something to do with it.