Question:
Going At Breakheart Speed...(And Crashing)
Five could have been too late
Waiting for my heart to break...as I go over the facts
They were oh so young...and we were so attached
Such a beautiful catastrophe
For so long its been all of me...we were so concerned
It never should have been like this...trite as discerned
Missing curfew and breaking our hearts
Burning our records in the sunset
This is an anthem of the youth we lost
How will we ever forget...
The nights we mourned the death
Of all conviction and convention and deception
We still talk this over...
We never got over...this...
Rebellious in our apathy
Consider this a formal appology...for all this time lost
We'll get back at you no matter how much the cost...
And this is my new obsession
Dropping your hints...I drop full allegations...you never understood!!!
Where did it all go wrong? You know I never could...understand...
Meet you by morning
We'll drive forever
I miss you like breathing
I can't hold it together
4 down just one to go(Theres just one thing that I will miss...)
Hear the car start(And I swear you drove me to this...)
Get you breathing...(inhale...exhale...repeat...)
Lay the seat down and listen to these lullabyes...(I swear you drove me to this...)
Dreams of release...We'll be forever sleeping...(I swear you drove me to...THIS...)
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Wow. That is pretty crazy. Good crazy. It seems really good at first glance. The ideas and word play you used throughout is clever, but not contrived. I'll try to add critique after school. Good job though!

Josh.
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First of all, i'm blown away by this song dude. it rocks!
Originally Posted by Opie Going At Breakheart Speed...(And Crashing)
Five could have been too late
Waiting for my heart to break...as I go over the facts
They were oh so young...and we were so attached
Such a beautiful catastrophe
For so long its been all of me...we were so concerned
It never should have been like this...trite as discerned
I really like the way you put these lines together. With the second part and all, i really really like the way they flow, nice.
Missing curfew and breaking our hearts
Burning our records in the sunset
This is an anthem of the youth we lost
How will we ever forget...
The nights we mourned the
Of all conviction and convention and deception
We still talk this over...
We never got over...this...

wow these lines are awesome. Great flow, great ideas, I'm really loving it.
Rebellious in our apathy
Consider this a formal appology...for all this time lost
We'll get back at you no matter how much the cost...
And this is my new obsession
Dropping your hints...I drop full allegations...you never understood!!!
Where did it all go wrong? You know I never could...understand...
I'm having a bit of trouble deciphering the whole meaning of this part, but it's probably just me because it always takes me a while to understand a deep song's(such as this) meaning. But I wouldn't change it.
Meet you by morning
We'll drive forever
I miss you like breathing
I can't hold it together
4 down just one to go(Theres just one thing that I will miss...)
Hear the car start(And I swear you drove me to this...)
Get you breathing...(inhale...exhale...repeat...)
Lay the seat down and listen to these lullabyes...(I swear you drove me to this...)
Dreams of release...We'll be forever sleeping...(I swear you drove me to...THIS...)
I like the solid imagery you have of the breathing and the car. And tying them together like that is cool.
All in all great song, i'd love to hear it. I really like songs with overlapping vocals, like i'm guessing this song does. It really reminds me of something Taking Back Sunday would write.
I can't wait till the next songwriting comp starts so i can nominate this one.
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WOW! thanks guys...Yeah is really Taking Back Sunday esque...The guitar part is pretty cool so far...I've still got some ends to tie up with the rhythm and whatnot...but thanks for the critiques...now that I have time to explain...Its about being overcontrolled...By parents by whoever overcontrols you...It's kind of a coping song...Thanks so much for stopping and reviewing though! Later guys!
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This is...awesome. Seriously...I love it. What does it sound like? It strikes me as kind of an emo song.