Question:
ok, here are lyrics to my latest song. umm, i wont be online at all for a while, but feel free to comment on this as i will read this thread when i fix my computer (currently its not powering up).
ok, here goes...
(Crys of a dying soul)
[Chorus]
Fighting the rage you feel inside.
Fighting the pain you try to hide.
Its all so wrong, its all so wrong
[vs1]
Freedom! Freedom from all your sickness!
Freedom! Freedom from all thats wrong with you!
Freedom! Freedom from what you know to be a lie!
Freedom! Freedom from the lie you call your life!
Freedom! Freedom from an eternity of hurt!
Freedom! Freedom from the pain of a guilty soul!
Freedom! Freedom from a life of guilt and sorrow!
[chorus]
[Pre-chorus]
And I look at you! (hear the cries of a dying soul!)
And i see those things in you!(hear the cries of a dying soul!)
I see the war inside!
I see the fight inside of you!
[chorus]
[vs2]
Destruction! Destruction of the walls around your life.
Destruction! Destruction of the stone you call your heart.
Destruction! Destruction of the pain caused by all your guilt.
Destruction! Destruction of the pain caused by all your sins.
You lead a life of pain and suffering! And now it all crumbles down around you!
It all tumbles down!
[pre-chorus, chorus]
[vs3]
Go! Go, hurry up and move.
Go! Go away from here!
Lie! Lie your way to an early grave!
Lie! Lie your way to a slow and painful death!
Fall! Fall away from what you know to be a lie!
Fall! Fall far from this place you find so disgusting!
Drown! Drown in a sea of all your hate!
Drown! Drown in a pool of your own rage!
[pre-chorus, chorus]
[vs4]
Fear! Fear of the unknown!
Fear! Fear of maybe never going home!
Fear! Fear becase you cant do it on your own!
Fear! Fear for reasons I dont understand!
Fear! Fear of things you dont comprehend!
Fear! Fear for the ones you love but cannot help!
Fear! Fear of the things you cannot change!
[pre-chorus, chorus]
[vs5]
Falling! Falling far away from grace!
Falling! Falling away from the things I know!
Falling! Falling far from the things I love!
[Prechorus, chorus}
[Bridge]
And now you think you felt it all.
The fear, the rejection, the pain the shame. You felt it all.
The rage, the hate, the anger, despair. You felt it all.
The lack of love, the loss of life.
You havnt felt it all, there's so much more to feel.
So much more to life!
Give up this hate!
Give up this rage!
Give up this pain!
Give up this Guilt!
And feel free to live again!
[chorus-with extension]
Fighting the rage you feel inside!
Fighting the pain you try to hide!
Its all so wrong, its all so wrong!
But you dont have to fight anymore!
You dont have to hide those things inside!
Bring them out, confess this sin!
Make those things that are so wrong, become so right! Become so right!
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I know its long, but i couldnt cover all the things i wanted with just2 or 3 verses. Id greatly apreciate any comments yall have.
Answer:
Wow, it's kinda long I like it a lot. I think of Skillet or Pillar. "Open Wounds" is what popped into my kind when I read it, just thinking melody wise. I think it could be awesome!!! I like it. If you can record it, do
-Mara
Answer:
I also get the feeling of pillar while reading this lyrics. very "out there", good though
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mara, kd, thanx for responding.
lol, im kinda suprised yall thot of pillar when reading the lyrics. when i wrote that i just listened to the whole S.O.D. (demon hunter) album again, lol.
i hope someday i can record that song, thats the only one ive written so far that i really enjoyed writing.
when i post songs in the future, you will see they all pretty much seem "out there" just as much as this one, but not so repetative.
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dude, I just read your lyrics and I think it would make an awesome song.
as I was reading it in my head it sounded like a mix of demon hunter and marytr AD. Heavy down tuned palm muted guitars with lots of double bass from the drums and a lot of screaming with some hardcore breakdowns at the end. Sounds bad in my head. Wow, you've inspired me to write some music. Thanks man.
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wow, what u imagined in your head just about captures the feel i want this song to have someday.
have u been reading my mind or somethin? lol