Question:
I wrote this after watching the DVD of Louie Giglio's message on "The Otherness of God" (anyone seen it? it's amazing). The working title is "Greater" but if you have any suggestions, I'm open to them.
Verse 1:
You created the sky, the vast heavens above
The sun, moon, and stars, in their place
At the will of Your voice, they come at your beckon,
Heed Your calling, Your Wisdom, Your pace
Chorus:
You are high above the heavens
More than I can comprehend
Greater than any dream
Past beginning, or end
You cannot be defined in any simple human term
Still, You let Yourself shrink small enough to speak
To me, My God.
Verse 2:
You created the earth, from the empty, dark void
Formed each mountain with the care it was due
They speak of your, majesty, splendor and greatness
Only grasping just portions of You
Answer:
i recently got that DVD and those talks are awesome (in more ways than one!)
i really like that song
a couple of points though:
At the will of Your voice, they come at your beckon,
Heed Your calling, Your Wisdom, Your pace i can't fit the word heed in when i say this out loud!
it might flow a bit better if you left that word out, i don't think it would affect the meaning particularly.
You created the earth, from the empty, dark void
Formed each mountain with the care it was due again i can't quite seem to fit the second line in, there seems to be a syllable too many.
overall a very cool song
just out of interest did anyone go to the facedown conference? (i'm assuming thats the DVD you are talking about)
God Bless, Rich
Answer:
Originally Posted by ThanksALatte I wrote this after watching the DVD of Louie Giglio's message on "The Otherness of God" (anyone seen it? it's amazing). The working title is "Greater" but if you have any suggestions, I'm open to them. Cool.
Verse 1:
You created the sky, the vast heavens above
The sun, moon, and stars, in their place
At the will of Your voice, they come at your beckon,
Heed Your calling, Your Wisdom, Your pace I like that last line. That's a good concept, heeding God's pace. Well done on avoiding the cliché "face" rhyme with "place" there.
Chorus:
You are high above the heavens
More than I can comprehend
Greater than any dream
Past beginning, or end
You cannot be defined in any simple human term
Still, You let Yourself shrink small enough to speak
To me, My God. I like the first four lines. Little cliché in parts, but it works well together. Not a fan of the last three lines. God shrinking seems like a strange and possibly un-Biblical image. I think modifying the image to refer more to God coming in human flesh in Jesus Christ would work a little better.
Verse 2:
You created the earth, from the empty, dark void
Formed each mountain with the care it was due
They speak of your, majesty, splendor and greatness
Only grasping just portions of You Wonderful. This is a fantastic verse.
Answer:
Originally Posted by ThanksALatte Verse 1:
You created the sky, the vast heavens above
The sun, moon, and stars, in their place
At the will of Your voice, they come at your beckon,
Heed Your calling, Your Wisdom, Your pace There seems to be some redundency in those last two lines but I don't think it's really a problem. Great verse.
Chorus:
You are high above the heavens
More than I can comprehend
Greater than any dream
Past beginning, or end
You cannot be defined in any simple human term
Still, You let Yourself shrink small enough to speak
To me, My God. "Past beginning, or end" doesn't seem to follow from the last line too well.
The second to last line could probably be greatly improved simply by making it active voice instead of passive voice.
Verse 2:
You created the earth, from the empty, dark void
Formed each mountain with the care it was due
They speak of your, majesty, splendor and greatness
Only grasping just portions of You "Only grasping just portions of You," could be improved. It's a little bit awkward stylistically.
Answer:
Originally Posted by Skeeter God shrinking seems like a strange and possibly un-Biblical image. I think modifying the image to refer more to God coming in human flesh in Jesus Christ would work a little better.
I had it as "Still, You let yourself be small enough to speak..." so I could change it back. But my point in putting "shrink" was not to make God seem smaller, but to bring to light the concept that He chooses to make himself small enough so that we can grasp parts of him--not a whole lot to do with Jesus coming as God in the flesh, but more the fact that He is so enormous, but still puts Himself into a small enough...form (for lack of better wording) so that we can communicate with us. Did that make sense? LoL
Bobthecockroach--I am not too fond of the last line either, but I had a heck of a time coming up with anything. ha. I am still playing around with it and working on it. I'll put edit when I find something.
Rich...I did not go to the Face Down conference, but was shown the Face Down DVD at a Bible study. And the words do fit when I sing it, but the rhythm is a bit tricky.
Thanks for all of your comments. It's great to get some constructive criticism once in a while. I get sick of the "it's great don't change a thing" and the "i don't like it but don't feel like telling you why."
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