Question:
It's sketchy.. it's crazy..
VERSE 1
I look into your blues skies
spinning out, spinning into space
I look through those cloudy nights
as they cover your face
CHORUS
You say life is a train ride
Well, pick me up hun
I wanna come along
You say that life goes too fast
Well, that's alright hun
I'm gonna come along
VERSE 2
Don't try to hide
My dear, my dear
please stop asking 'why'
would you leave me here?
Answer:
its good, the first verse seems a bit disconnected though!
it uses loads of imagery which just gets dropped and replaced by the train theme in the chorus and V2. it would stand well as the base of a song on its own i think
good stuff
God Bless, Rich
Answer:
Originally Posted by I-Am-Snappy its good, the first verse seems a bit disconnected though!
it uses loads of imagery which just gets dropped and replaced by the train theme in the chorus and V2. it would stand well as the base of a song on its own i think
good stuff
God Bless, Rich
The first verse, I'll admit is hard to understand. It's talking about his adventurous side, and his hesitant side. The fact that he looks out in life for dare-devil activities.. but he's really hesitant to pursue anything emotionally or spiritually...
I'm thinking about adding a stanza to each of the verses... any suggestions?
Swank