Question:
this one's kinda John Denver infuenced in the music and the first couple of verses...but the rest is Gospel!
Beyond the Skies
Rom. 1:20-21; Ps. 104:19-26; Rom. 3:23; 1 John. 1:8-9; Heb.11:6
V1- Have you ever seen the sun set in the sky?
Have you ever felt a cool spring wind?
Have you ever been to a place so beautiful,
That you want to go back there again?
V2-Have you ever seen the beauty of Nature,
In all of its delicate design?
Have you ever thought that maybe there’s so much more,
That lies beyond our cultural line?
Chorus 1- Do you realize that this can’t just be chance?
Do you realize to know will take more than a glance?
Do you realize God is beyond our eyes?
There’s so much more that lies beyond the skies.
V3- Have you ever seen pain and suffering?
Have you ever felt your own heart ache?
Have you ever watched an event so disastrous,
That you thought that your own heart would break?
V4-Have you ever felt your own heart’s wickedness?
Have you ever tasted conscious guilt?
Have you ever smelt the vileness of your heart,
Amidst the walls that you have built?
Chorus 2- Do you realize we are lost and broken?
Do you realize we are slaves to sin?
Do you realize Satan is beyond our eyes?
There’s so much more that lies beyond the skies.
V5-Have you ever heard the Gospel story,
Of how God came to earth as a Man?
And how He died to make men holy,
And then rose to life again?
V6-Have you ever heard that Jesus longs for you,
To know you as His own?
And to accept is to pray “forgive me!”
And to believe all that He has shown?
Chorus 3- Do you realize He offers a free gift?
Do you realize it’s up to you to take the lift?
Do you realize Love is in front of our eyes?
There’s so much more that lies beyond the skies!
Answer:
V2-Have you ever seen the beauty of Nature, 11
In all of its delicate design? 9
Have you ever thought that maybe there’s so much more, 12
That lies beyond our cultural line? 9
I think that cutting out the word that in line three cutting out the word "so" would make it flow better. Or you could change "That lies" to "lying" which I think would be more effective. That cuts out a syllable in the last two lines pairing it up with the first two.
In other areas - on your verses if you could better rhyme lines two and four on verse one.
Answer:
The verses remind me of my poem Have You Ever
Answer:
Originally Posted by Gsus_Rawks 9
I think that cutting out the word that in line three cutting out the word "so" would make it flow better. Or you could change "That lies" to "lying" which I think would be more effective. That cuts out a syllable in the last two lines pairing it up with the first two.
In other areas - on your verses if you could better rhyme lines two and four on verse one.
If you heard the music,it would fit better.