Question:
I can't think of a good title yet, so it's untitled for now. The song will seem cliche at times, but it's meant to. It's a part love song sort of, but if that's all you get out of it when you read it, then you've missed the point.
Verse 1:
Cryptic cliches don't seem
appropriate at this time.
I promise to tell you my secret,
if you keep it and make like a mime.
What if I was to say,
that my stupid words got in the way?
When all I'm trying to do,
is say three words to please you.
Chorus:
I'll walk with you,
from school to home
I'll be as quiet as
a garden gnome.
It's hard to say,
I care.
It's harder to say,
I'm scared
I'll keep an eye on you
all day long.
I'll be right there if
something goes wrong.
It's easy to show,
I care.
It's easier to show,
I'm scared.
Verse 2:
Are you thinking every word I say
sounds like it was well rehearsed?
Well you're right, I'm a loser.
I practice everything I say to you.
What if I was to say,
there's something wrong inside of me?
Every problem I have seems terrible
when it's only me.
Bridge:
I'll bang my head against the wall
for the hundredth time.
This is stupid..
I can barely even rhyme
three words I need to say,
before the end of the day..
Do you know what they are?
(because, I don't..)
Ending thingy:
I think it's time for me to go,
but I'm hoping that you'll always know
I'll be here everyday, (but barely)
I won't let you fade away.
And I know this'll sound horribly cliche,
but I've got to say it anyways
I'd give my life just to see, (or would I?)
you smiling back at me.
Answer:
Not bad, I actually like it. Had some good lines in it. I can't RC right now, I don't have time.