Question:
This one is a bit of a departure for me, I purposely wrote it in a different style than I normally do, so if there's a noticeable downward spiral in quality, I'd like to blame it on that, and the fact that I wrote it out quickly.
It plays in my mind as a blues/spiritual hybrid.
Binary Wasteland
Man is full of sin, honestly, there was only ever One,
Without hell to pay in hell for endless wrong He'd done,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
Thank God, it’s not my home.
There’s not a hope in all the world for all the world, but one,
There’s nothing but sin, or else there’s nothing but the blood,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
Thank God, it’s not my home.
There’s not a single difference your self-flagellation can make,
Justice has a thirst only that one man’s blood can slake,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
The world is a wasteland,
Thank God, it’s not my home.
I’m an awfully awful man, and I’ve admitted it to God’s face,
But like the world, I’ve only one hope, and that hope is His grace.
Answer:
Wow, yeah. That went downhill after the first couple stanzas, which are excellent. The third and fourth verse are pretty weak. The chorus is solid, a great centerpiece, and the first and second verses are very nice couplets. The third and fourth verses could use a rewrite.
Answer:
Indeed. I'll work on getting something a bit better for the last two couplets.
Thanks, Skeet!