Question:
Just looking for some honest crtique on this. The song is called "The 'Stang" Its metaphorical song about a rusted out car in the desert who life now passes by. Feel free to critque the lyrics, music, vocals and anything else you might see that needs work. Chorus is done, verses are in very rough draft, music will be modified to fit the lyrics, but the rhythm in the MP3 will remain the same.
Note - Stil very much WIP
The ‘Stang
Drew Neal © 2007
Verse 1
‘Long a back road’s dirty ditch
Sits a rusted out hulk, man what a switch
A ‘69 mustang is what she was
Whata beauty ‘till somebody pulled out the plugs
Pre chorus
How many times can the world spin around
You tell me ‘cuz the number can’t be found
Chorus
’69 Mustang where have you been
Burinin’ in the sun
Rustin’ in the sand
’69 Mustang where have you been
Has your life got away from you
Verse 2
Ya’ came with 6 flavors of V8
Nothin’ could catch ya’ when the road was streight
Livin’ life in the fast lane
Spent your time like you weren’t the one pay’n
Pre chorus
How many times can the world spin around
You tell me ‘cuz the number can’t be found
Chorus
’69 Mustang where have you been
Burinin’ in the sun
Rustin’ in the sand
’69 Mustang where have you been
Has your life got away from you
Verse 3
Guitar Solo over 1st phrase
Every place was only a drive through
From the dinner-date to the hot interview
Pre chorus
How many times can the world spin around
You tell me ‘cuz the number can’t be found
Outro
Answer:
This could be a fun little rock song. Your vocals are a little breathy, when they should be more punchy. Rock out with it!
Lyrically it's mostly just fun. If you took the 'stang and turned it into a metaphor of how life is passing you by, it could be interesting.
Other than that, my main critique is grammatical. Misused apostrophes are my pet peeve. The last line should be "Has your life gotten away from you?"